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1. Almost all of my friends, including all of the neighborhood kids, and the kids from school and my cousins are going to be at my birthday party.
· Almost all has already described all that is included.
· Almost all of my friends and cousins are going to be at my birthday party.

2. The other day I went down to the house at the other end of the street from mine and asked my neighbor, whose name is Gary, if I could buy one of the carrots that he grows in his garden.
· The other house at the end of the street has already described from my place.
· Gary has been explained as the neighbor’s name.
· Obviously he grows carrots in his garden.
· The other day I went down to the house at the other end of the street and asked my neighbor Gary if I could buy one of the carrots that he grows.

3. My brand new printer, which I just bought, has already started to go on the fritz, doing all of these things that it shouldn’t.
· My brand new printer has already described an item just bought.
· All of these is not necessary.
· My brand new printer has already started to go on the fritz, doing things that it shouldn’t.

4. Her mom worked at the university, teaching classes on economics.
· Her mom is a lecturer in economics at the university.

5. She didn’t have a regular job; she stayed at home and took care of her kids.
· She’s a housewife.

6. We were really sad.
· We were devastated.

7. The neighbors’ dog is incredibly cute.
· The neighbor’s dog is gorgeous

8. When my sister returned from the beach, she was very sunburned.
· My sister returned from the beach red as a crab

9. If you didn’t hear me, I will repeat the instructions again.
· If you didn’t hear me, I will repeat the instructions.

10. The old car still remains parked in that field.
· The old car remains parked in that field.

11. After much thought and consideration, Jim decided to stop seeing Jessica.
· After much thought, Jim decided to stop seeing Jessica.

12. In the modern world of today, we are surrounded by technological advance.
· In the modern world, we are surrounded by technological advance.

13. Maria’s hair color was a deep auburn.
· Maria’s hair was a deep auburn.